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i told them how surprised and excited i was to have my painting selected, especially since i’d felt so incompetent at the beginning and i knew the competition was so ruthless.
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“yup, it was a big surprise,” i told them. “i’m excited that my painting was selected! especially since i felt so incompetent at the beginning and the competition was so ruthless.”
“honestly, i was surprised,” i told them truthfully. “the competition was ruthless, and i felt incompetent at the beginning. it’s really exciting to have my painting selected! ”
“i’m in! my painting is in! i feel a fist pump and a little dance coming on,” i said, grinning. i thought about how i felt so incompetent at the beginning because of the ruthless competition.
“did you hear? ” i asked them. “my painting got selected! exciting, right? ” i smiled. “especially given that i felt so incompetent at the beginning and that the competition was ruthless! ”