A hook sentences about the short story of Moonlit road

Compare: what are the similarities and differences between "artificial flavors" and "natural flavors"? why does schlosser explain these two terms in such detail?

Ineed simplifying this thesis and making it easier to understand for the reader (more concise) "no matter how religious one may be, one’s faith tends to change under unexpected and challenging circumstances."

What about the sentence structure in this passage build suspense