Read the student paragraph about a theme presented in “Raymond's Run.” One theme in this story is “Treat others the way you would like for them to treat you.” Squeaky feels that adults should give kids the same respect that they expect from them. When Mr. Pearson calls Squeaky by her nickname, she thinks, “. . . he’s got no right to call me Squeaky, if I can’t call him Beanstalk.”

According to the PIE structure for writing about theme, what is missing from this paragraph that should be present?

a summary of the story
a theme
text evidence
an explanation of evidence

Morei would really appreciate it. his eyes snapped open. a musty smell flooded his senses. the room was lowly lit, curved with smooth light gray walls. the floor was clear black tiled. he stood up, surprised to see no door, but only a trap door on the ceiling that blended in with the walls. the room was unfurnished, which struck him as strange. as you write and revise, ask yourself these questions: 1. do all of the sentences in this paragraph belong here? (unity) 2. are all of the sentences in this paragraph in the right place? (coherence-- a method of development) 3. are all of the sentences in this paragraph smoothly connected together into a whole paragraph? (coherence--use of transitional devices) once you've made certain that your paragraphs are both unified and coherent, edit your work for problems in grammar and mechanics before submitting it to your teacher.