Imagine that you are living in america during the 1750s and employed as an advertising agent for the thirteen original colonies. you are hired to write the text material for a brochure on one of the thirteen original colonies. research one colony of your choice, using at least three research sources, and use your information to write the text material for your brochure in such a manner that encourages people to settle in the colony. it is important to think about the political, economic, social, and geographic reasons for settling in the colony.

i chose new york. it is supposed to be 250 words.
this is what i have so far. how is it thus far, how can i make it better and what kind of other stuff should i add to make it longer?

being that new york is not dominated by a specific religion, residents are free to worship as they chose. it gives way to religious freedom for quakers, catholics, lutherans, jews and others.

new york is dominated by forests, rivers, mountains, and lakes. the forests provide a large amount of lumber, livestock and a wonderful place for harvesting furs. also being close to the great lakes makes new york a great place for fishing and whaling. it is a mild climate with warm summers and mild winters. the colony has great soil because it is near the atlantic region, suited for farming certain plants like rye, maize, oats, barley, potatoes and grains. there are also plenty of products like plows, kettles, locks, nails, and more that are able to be produced here.

Explanation:

Work on punctuation and capitalization.

Separate certain things into sections and make them longer. You talked about the terrain of New York which should be one paragraph. The resources and what grows in New York should be another paragraph. Lastly, you should talk about what occupations colonists had in New York in a different paragraph.

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From Dutch to English one of the 13 colonies, New York had been through a lot back in 1662. New York was originally called New Amsterdam when it was founded by Peter Minuit back in 1662. "The New York Colony was originally a Dutch colony called New Amsterdam, founded by Peter Minuit in 1626 on Manhattan Island. In 1664 the Dutch surrendered the colony to the English and it was renamed New York, after the Duke of York.

    Why did the English want New York? The English wanted New York for 2 main reasons. The first is that they wanted to dominate the fur trade and gaining that land would increase profits significantly.  The 2nd reason is to show pure supremacy over the Dutch. Having power gave England more bragging rights.  

   "Natural resources in the New York Colony included agricultural land, coal, furs, forestry (timber), and iron ore." The English wanted to capitalize off of these resources. They shipped them back to England and sold them or used them for certain jobs. This boosted their economy. "Exports from the New York Colony included iron ore as a raw material and as manufactured goods such as tools, plows, nails and kitchen items such as kettles."  

   The colony of  New York was still ruled by one person and he had the final say so but "In 1683, James II guaranteed New York a representative legislature and personal freedoms through the governor's authority. The governors sought advice and assistance from local powerful citizens, became entangled in local party politics, and made political concessions in return for increased revenues as their authority declined." Although the Duke of York was owned New York, "The Duke of York never visited his colony and exercised little direct control of it. He elected to administer his government through governors, councils, and other officers appointed by himself. No provision was made for an elected assembly."

   Although New York had been through a lot and passed down the hands of a few rulers it was still a very successful colony. It did not have great farmland because of the mountainous terrain but the waters were perfect for fishing and that is how they banked.

Work Cited

New York Colony facts. Soft Schools. (n.d.). Retrieved October 8, 2021, from https://www.softschools.com/facts/13_colonies/new_york_colony_facts/2043/.  

Encyclopedia.com. (2021, October 8). ." dictionary of American history. . encyclopedia.com. 22 Sep. 2021. Encyclopedia.com. Retrieved October 8, 2021, from https://www.encyclopedia.com/history/dictionaries-thesauruses-pictures-and-press-releases/new-york-colony.  

Yost, A. R. (2021, September 19). New York Colony facts. The History Junkie. Retrieved October 8, 2021, from https://thehistoryjunkie.com/new-york-colony-facts/.

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