Which best describes this sentence? the free gift she received was an unexpected surprise. a) the sentence is concise and free of error. b) the sentence needs revision to remove redundancy. c) the sentence has been revised to avoid redundancy. d) the sentence is concise but contains distracting errors.

B)The sentence needs revision to remove redundancy.

Redundancy occurs when the same thing is said more than once. This can happen in writing especially through use of adjectives and adverbs. A perfect example would be "The silent mouse quietly explored the house." In this case, the mouse has already been described as silent so to use the adverb quietly to describe how he explored is redundant. In the sentence for the prompt, the redundancy is unexpected surprise. A surprise is something the object of the surprise did not see coming. It is unexpected. By describing the surprise as unexpected, the speaker is repeating him/herself.

could you put the choices and excert up hun

i’m writing a memoir and i’ve been given the great suggestion of placing a ‘sub-narrative’ within some of the chapters – sort of, what was going on with me in the grand scheme of things.

i was wondering how to format this so that it is very obvious we are stepping out the of story.

firstly is a change in font from serif to sans workable? i also use dashes for a scene change. was thinking of using a different scene-changer too.

here’s a (shortened) example:

university – or what’s known as ‘uni’ in australia – were some of the best days of my life. where else do you get to potter around in a great location, have very little responsibility, learn lots of things, do lots of things and walk out four years later with a bonus – a degree!

with my university years i had immersed myself into community of intelligent ambitious people. generally everyone had a confidence about themselves. they knew where they were going in life and weren’t threatened by others.

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(sorry couldn’t show the fonts in this comment field)

too much?