The following text includes run-on sentences and fragments. Your task is to fix the mistakes by rewriting the paragraph. Last July, my family and I travelled to London it was my mum’s birthday, she turned 50! When we arrived at the hotel we were shocked by the long queue at the check in desk. The receptionist was super nice upgraded us to a beautiful suit. Left our luggage and headed to Harrods. The weather was incredible it was sunny and breezy. Since tired we did not stay out for long.

The next morning, my brother and I on an adventure on our own. We took a taxi to the London Eye it was phenomenal! Loved the ride and the views. After lunch we fish and chips it delicious.

Explain how mrs. van daan feels about anne?

Memories of a memory have you ever witnessed something amazing, shocking or surprising and found when describing the event that your story seems to change the more you tell it? have you ever experienced a time when you couldn't really describe something you saw in a way that others could understand? if so, you may understand why some experts think eyewitness testimony is unreliable as evidence in scientific inquiries and trials. new insights into human memory suggest human memories are really a mixture of many non-factual things. first, memory is vague. imagine your room at home or a classroom you see every day. most likely, you could describe the room very generally. you could name the color of the walls, the floors, the decorations. but the image you describe will never be as specific or detailed as if you were looking at the actual room. memory tends to save a blurry image of what we have seen rather than specific details. so when a witness tries to identify someone, her brain may recall that the person was tall, but not be able to say how tall when faced with several tall people. there are lots of different kinds of "tall." second, memory uses general knowledge to fill in gaps. our brains reconstruct events and scenes when we remember something. to do this, our brains use other memories and other stories when there are gaps. for example, one day at a library you go to quite frequently, you witness an argument between a library patron and one of the librarians. later, when telling a friend about the event, your brain may remember a familiar librarian behind the desk rather than the actual participant simply because it is recreating a familiar scene. in effect, your brain is combining memories to you tell the story. third, your memory changes over time. it also changes the more you retell the story. documented cases have shown eyewitnesses adding detail to testimony that could not have been known at the time of the event. research has also shown that the more a witness's account is told, the less accurate it is. you may have noticed this yourself. the next time you are retelling a story, notice what you add, or what your brain wants to add, to the account. you may also notice that you drop certain details from previous tellings of the story. with individual memories all jumbled up with each other, it is hard to believe we ever know anything to be true. did you really break your mother's favorite vase when you were three? was that really your father throwing rocks into the river with you when you were seven? the human brain may be quite remarkable indeed. when it comes to memory, however, we may want to start carrying video cameras if we want to record the true picture. part a and part b below contain one fill-in-the-blank to be used for all three question responses. your complete response must be in the format a, b, c including the letter choice, commas, and a space after the commas. part a: which of the following best explains why memories from childhood are unreliable? fill in blank 1 using a, b, or c. our brains add details and general knowledge to childhood memories. our brains are not as reliable as video cameras are. our brains create new stories to make the past more interesting. part b select one quotation from the text that supports your answer to part a. add your selection to blank 1 using e, f, or g. but the image you describe will never be as specific or detailed as if you were looking at the actual room. when a witness tries to identify someone, her brain may recall that the person was tall, but not be able to say how tall. to do this, our brains use other memories and other stories when there are gaps. select one quotation from the text that supports your answer to part a. add your selection to blank 1 using h, i, or j. documented cases have shown eyewitnesses adding detail to testimony that could not have been known at the time of the event. with individual memories all jumbled up with each other, it is hard to believe we ever know anything to be true. when it comes to memory, however, we may want to start carrying video cameras if we want to record the true picture answer for blank 1:

Write 2. using what you have learned about evidence, explanation, quotations, and paraphrase, write your body paragraphs in the space below. muir and wordsworth you will need to include at least one of each of the following: a direct quotation introduced with a complete sentence and a colon a direct quotation introduced with a signaling phrase and a comma a direct quotation that is introduced and explained in one sentence a paraphrased example an embedded quotation locate 3. within the body paragraphs of your essay, locate a direct quotation that is introduced with a complete sentence and a colon. copy and paste it here. be sure to include the entire sentence that contains the quotation as well as the explanation sentence(s) that come after it. 4. within the body paragraphs of your essay, locate a direct quotation that is introduced with a signaling phrase and a comma. copy and paste it here. be sure to include the entire sentence that contains the quotation as well as the explanation sentence(s) that come after it. 5. within the body paragraphs of your essay, locate a direct quotation that is introduced and explained in one sentence. copy and paste it here. 6. within the body paragraphs of your essay, locate one paraphrased example and copy and paste it here. 7. within the body paragraphs of your essay, locate one embedded quotation and copy and paste it here. 8. using techniques learned in this lesson, write the conclusion to your essay in the space below. 9. how did you connect your introduction and your conclusion? (did you use a similar technique, repetition of a significant word or phrase, explain. 10. copy and paste the words or sentence that signals closure of your essay. 11. copy and paste the sentences that synthesize your ideas. remember, synthesis combines the main ideas of your essay and comments on the significance of those ideas. 12. copy and paste the sentences that answer the question from the prompt: what conclusion or implications can you draw? (it is ok if you have these sentences as a part of your synthesis or challenge to your audience. include them here as well. it is also ok if these sentences are separate from those two elements.) 13. copy and paste the sentences from your conclusion that challenge your audience to think, feel, or do something.