Read the following sentence, which needs revising, editing, and proofreading: Mikhail loved halloween best because it was fun and no pressure and expectation; plus, candy and
dressing up!
Which revision below is most effective?
Mikhail loves Halloween. He loves the fun of it. He loves not having pressure and expectations.
She loves candy and dressing up!
Mikhail loves Halloween best out of all the holidays because it's all about fun. There's no
O pressure to pick out the perfect gift or cook the perfect meal, and no expectations that the day
has to be emotional or meaningful. Plus, there are parties, candy, and dressing up!
Mikhail loved Halloween best for the following reasons: fun; pressure and expectations; candy
and dressing up!
Out of all the Holidays, Mikhail loved Halloween best because it was fun and not pressured and
full of expectations; plus, there will be candy and dressing up!