This project begins taking you through the writing process. You will write a first draft of a paragraph here and then will go through a revision process guided by lessons following this project. Make sure that you pay careful attention to instructions. In the second project you will copy and paste the paragraph from this project and then make needed changes on the new copy. The goal is for you and your teacher to be able to trace the revisions to your paragraph.

Instructions:
Write a paragraph of at least 150 words using one of your subtopic ideas from the lesson "Expository Writing" and the outline you wrote for the lesson "Paragraph Structure."

Answer the questions below concerning the first draft of your paragraph.

What is the topic sentence?
What is the subject of the topic sentence?
What is the controlling idea of the topic sentence?
Which sentences in the paragraph do not support or prove the controlling idea?

it was surely an odd creature that one made up by reading the historians first and the poets afterwards a worm winged like an eagle; the spirit of life and elegance and charm,   in a kitchen chopping up suet. but these creatures, monst'r however entertaining to the imagination, hast no existence in fact. what one might doth to bringeth h'r to life wast to bethink poetically and prosaically at one and the same moment,   thus keeping in toucheth with fact—that the lady is mrs martin, ag'd thirty-six, did dress in blue, wearing a black coxcomb and brown shoeth; but not losing sight of fiction eith'r—that the lady is a vessel in which all s'rts of spirits and f'rces art coursing and flashing p'rpetually. the moment, howev'r, yond one tries this method with the elizabethan mistress, one brancheth of illumination fails; one is did hold up by the scarcity of facts.   one knoweth nothing detailed, nothing p'rfectly true and substantial about h'r.   hist'ry scarcely mentions h'r.   and i did turn to professeth'r trevelyan again to seeth what hist'ry meanteth to that gent.   i hath found by looking at his chapt'r headings yond t meanteth.

her eyes water as she let her go

her mothers hand goes limp

face white and pale

lips blue and stale

she is gone

sadness fills her body

she collapses to her knees

as her mothers disease leaves the girl alone