~GIVING BRAINLEST~ Pleaseee help *for school* I need help building on what I already have

I just need help with this part it's for one of the dreams this is what I have so far: It was a dark and gloomy night where she was by herself exploring her destination when she bumped into someone who looked familiar but didn’t know who it was so kept walking saying sorry and moving along their different paths.

If you want to see what the story is about look at the picture:

what do u need done u didnt give us any questions to answer or a format of writing

Explanation:

Good concept but needs better execution

Explanation:

You use the wrong pronunciation and you go to quickly over the story.  It felt like it was over to quickly.  Im confused on who the main character is in the story so try to make that a little more clear by giving the main character more attention and detail in the story.   Also  don't put the actual number but spell it if the number is less than 10.  Try to put jucier detail into the story because the story goes by way to fast.  If the female is the main character in the story then focus on her view point of the kidnapping than doing it from Tony's viewpoint of the events.  

not sure maybe the subject closer to it or subject-verb agreement

sentences vary by structure as well as by function. there are compound, complex, and compound-complex sentences.

simple sentence

i like to read.

a simple sentence has one independent clause.

compound sentence

i like to read, and i also like to write.

a compound sentence includes more than one independent clause, connected by a coordinating conjunction (and, but, for, nor, or, so, or yet).

complex sentence

i prefer to read books that are bestsellers.

a complex sentence includes one independent clause and one or more dependent clauses. (a dependent clause is one that cannot stand alone.) types of dependent clauses include relative clauses (i kicked the boy who pinched me), adverb clauses (i am going home now because i have a curfew), and noun clauses (i don't know what to do next).

compound-complex sentence

although i prefer to read current bestsellers, i do like to read old agatha christie mysteries, and i also like some 20th-century science fiction.

compound-complex sentences take a bunch of clauses (multiple independent clauses, and one or more dependent clauses) and toss them together like a salad. although these sentences take practice to write in a grammatically correct fashion, they can hold a tremendous amount of meaning, and are common in academic writing.