Read the introduction to a personal statement.

(1) usually, when people talk about "rocky” relationships, it’s with a frown, but mine has enriched my life. (2) i became fascinated with rocks when i was really young, and throughout my childhood you could usually find me with my pockets bulging from whatever stony treasures i’d scavenged that day. (3) when my science teacher taught us a unit on geology, i realized that my fascination could become an exciting career that could also me make good money. (4) obtaining an internship to work on the geological exhibit at the museum is an important step on my road to being a geologist.

why does the writer need to revise the personal statement?

sentence 1 should include the writer’s first name.
sentence 2 should state what the essay prompt was.
sentence 3 should avoid mentioning money.
sentence 4 should avoid the extreme opinion.

Read the excerpt from act 3 of a doll’s house. mrs. linde: you seemed to me to imply that with me you might have been quite another man. krogstad: i am certain of it. mrs. linde: is it too late now? krogstad: christine, are you saying this deliberately? yes, i am sure you are. i see it in your face. have you really the courage, then—? mrs. linde: i want to be a mother to someone, and your children need a mother. we two need each other. nils, i have faith in your real character—i can dare anything together with you. krogstad [grasps her hands]. , , christine! now i shall find a way to clear myself in the eyes of the world. ah, but i forgot— how does the conflict in this passage develop a theme? mrs. linde creates a conflict by promising something she cannot give to krogstad, which develops the theme that empty promises can destroy relationships. krogstad continues the conflict by choosing clearing his name over having a life with mrs. linde, which develops the theme that you must often choose yourself over others. krogstad creates a conflict by deceiving mrs. linde about his intentions, which develops the theme that, in love, actions speak louder than words. mrs. linde resolves the conflict by committing to a new life with krogstad, which develops the theme that new beginnings are always possible.