One of your classmates has asked you to help him revise a speech he will be giving about the importance of facing fears. Revise his speech (found below) in the following ways: Make the speech formal.
Make the details more specific to help strengthen the speech. You may add supporting details as needed, even if you make them up. (15 points)
NOTE: Underline any lines you copy from his original speech.

Speech text draft
Fears are bad for us. People shouldn't have them. Fears can psych you out and keep you from doing something worthwhile. Even something you've wanted to do all your life. Imagine finally being able to hike the Appalachian Trail, a super long trail running from Maine to Georgia. It's hard to hike this trail. Lots of people try but they can't because they don't have what it takes. But, you make it this far. Then, your worst fear, the thing that makes you really anxious happens as you're hiking. What would you do? You'd probably give up. Now you can't do your lifelong dream but you should be able to. We have to face our fears. It's not worth it to live life in fear!

In just over one hundred years, between 1701 and 1810, 252,500 enslaved africans were brought to barbados—an island that occupies only 166 square miles (making it, today, one of the smallest countries in the world). the english then set out to conquer more sugar islands, starting with jamaica, which they took from spain in 1655. in the same period that the 252,500 africans were brought to barbados, 662,400 africans were taken to jamaica. thus, sugar drove more than 900,000 people into slavery, across the atlantic, to barbados and jamaica—and these were just two of the sugar islands. the english were eagerly filling antigua, nevis, saint kitts, and montserrat with slaves and sugar mills. they took over much of dutch guiana for the same reason. seeing the fortunes being made in sugar, the french started their own scramble to turn the half of the island of hispaniola that they controlled (which is now haiti), as well as martinique, guadeloupe, and french guiana (along the south american coast near dutch guiana), into their own sugar colonies, which were filled with hundreds of thousands more african slaves. by 1753, british ships were taking average of 34,250 slaves from africa every year, and by 1768, that number had reached 53,100. –sugar changed the world, marc aronson and marina budhos how do the authors use historical evidence to support their claim? x(a) they use secondary sources to show how french and english monarchs were indifferent to enslaved people. x(b)they use secondary sources to show that enslaved people often fought for their freedom after arriving in the caribbean. the answer is: (c)they use facts from primary sources to show how countries increased the number of enslaved people to produce more sugar. x(d)they use primary source interviews to show that countries could make more money in trading sugar without using enslaved people.