1. Identify the introduction paragraph that you think would receive a higher grade from your instructor and explain why it is the better version. Be sure to include specific examples in order to support your answer Introduction Paragraph A
Teachers are some of the most influential people in a child’s life. When I was in elementary school, Mrs. Greene, my Fourth grade teacher, was that teacher for me. I liked her greatly because she was kind and good at her job.
Introduction Paragraph B
Children need role models to look up to when they are young. Adults, such as professional athletes or pop stars, are often admired by young people. However, role models are usually people that lead extraordinary lives in local communities. My Fourth grade teacher, Mrs. Greene, was a role model to me because she gave me a love of books, tutored me and other students after school, and spent time fundraising so our school could afford to go on field trips every year.
2. Identify the three main points mentioned in the thesis statement of the stronger paragraph