How can you revise this paragraph to expand the variety of sentence patterns? Dogs make wonderful pets; golden retrievers are especially
friendly. I have two golden retrievers, both are very sweet. My parents
have greyhounds; they are a bit more nervous than my dogs.

Read this student's rough draft. i know it doesn't sound like much, but am psyched about the school fundraiser this spring. we are sponsoring a slam-dunk contest (on an eight-foot rim) for local middle schoolers. we're charging an entry fee for participants that will cover our costs, and we’ll charge admission at the door! three dollars per person—ka-ching! six of my neighbors have already said they are coming. i mean, who wouldn't come? participants will wear their school jerseys, and all their friends will come to cheer! which concluding sentence best reflects the writer's voice? the contest will take place in the liberty middle school gym, and the maximum capacity is 250 spectators. the contest promises to enrich our community as a variety of schools unite to support our fundraising effort. it will be sweet, because the band is providing music in the stands, and the dance squad is performing. students’ enthusiasm for this endeavor has blossomed, and it will reach full flower as the contest approaches