Hi there. I have a creative writing piece due, and I would appreciate it if anyone could help improve this piece of work to both interest a reader more and improve my level of writing. 'To be heartbroken, by definition, is to be suffering from overwhelming distress. To be overcome by sorrow. The emotional stress or pain that one feels at experiencing great and deep longing. To be inconsolable. And yet, Ophelia Özcan would not describe her heartbreak using any given dictionary definition. She would express her broken heart as poisoned. Poisoned by an emotion stronger than any other, an emotion believed to conquer all. An emotion so intense, so intoxicating, that its very existence is enough had ruined her. That emotion being the toxin of love. The toxin had coursed through her veins, minute by minute reaching closer to the heart as it seethed through. Each drop, each fluster of love that flowed through her blood; it darkened her heart as it continued to pump. Her loves venom was vigorous, it hadn't just tainted her heart, it aimed to corrupt her entirely. You see, once her heart had been blackened, the love that she possessed continued. It continued until her heart had been completely torn apart, until all that could be felt was her clustered chest, until the joys of love were replaced with the despairs of rage.'

depends on your school

when i was in high school i took ap biology my senior year and it was the hardest one for me because my teacher finished the material within the first month of school and then went on to doing advanced college level it was horrible. but at a nearby school ap biology was one of the easier aps. also, it depends on what you are interested i like math a lot so ap calculus was easier for me than most but i hate history so ap us government was harder for me than most.

dependent clause!

example: "before the food gets cold"

circle of life

today people might say life is like a movie. good or evil might be evil. babies come to the world connect with their inner self, their need, the body language of the people around them that's the ways the lear to live. but as years go through feelings, sensations, needs are left behind and now is the time of technology, to each other is old-fashioned, looking into somebodies eyes, get a real connection, writing down memories a dairy.

we need to back to real connections, caring about people around you and spending quality time with them. we need to find back the way to connect with ourselfs, let out our emotions, sensations, our real tastes without caring about what other might think/say about,but especially without judging others way of living, feeling and loving.  

as we grow we lose our ties with our real selves, and we get too much involved with media, work, politics. we become so much troubled that our energy vanishes away and we only have the disposition to sit in front of the tv on turn off ourselves.   that's unbearable, we need to find out the way not to lose ourselves on the road to adulthood. but especially we have to find a way to keep children on the track. it would be easier for them when they grow ´s a lot of people on that track you just need to keep your eyes wide open and you´ll see it.