What should I change? Also don’t worry about the first and last paragraph.

Explanation:

You repeated what the theme is like more than 5 times. It should not be the transition sentence as well as the start of the paragraph. Vary the ways the start and end your paragraphs.

You should have 3 pieces of evidence of your theme. Start with that instead of repeating your theme

" animal is healthy and eternally gratefully that you provided him with a warm home." and "the health and well-being of our animal friends is what is at stake here."

"valley of salt tears" and "dark, deep and foggy" are two images used to establish a mood of uncertainty and regret. this imagery is made up of sensory appeals to brings up   theological concerns of sin and retribution.

they conjure up the human   uncertainty about the divine and its relationship to the world.