PART 2: INTRO REVISION #2 Look at this introduction. There are a few errors that need to be revised. Highlight the parts
that are boring or incorrect, and then FIX the intro by revising the incorrect parts (you
can copy/paste the parts that are okay and use them).
Nowadays, technology is advancing really fast. Sometimes it moves too fast. Inventions are
being made that we don't need or think about the effects. A lot of the stuff we make these
days is unnecessary and makes people lazy instead of actually helping people. I believe that it's
going too far and there's a lot of repercussions of that.
WRITE REVISED VERSION HERE:

you didnt put the link on, so i cant read the paraphrase

major league baseball

explanation:

jack roosevelt robinson broke the color barrier in major league baseball.as he was the first african american to play in the major leagues, jackie robinson became the target of racial abuse. jackie robinson is referring to the historic event, harlem riot.

the president was the speaker and it was a great part of history.

explanation:

video of the national aeronautic space administration's (nasa) coverage of president john f. kennedy’s address at rice university, houston, texas, concerning the nation's efforts in space exploration. in his speech the president discusses the necessity for the united states to become an international leader in space exploration and famously states, "we choose to go to the moon in this decade and do the other things, not because they are easy, but because they are hard."

"get off of your lazy bum and come running with me or i'm dumping this pitcher of water on u " u say with a smile. she thinks your joking so she ignores you about 10 seconds later shes screaming wile water is dripping everywhere you say "here comes the second one! " then you here her say okay, your such a j e r k ! ill be ready in 5 put the pitcher down " she say in an angry tone. and you smile in victory

good enough?