Dylan wrote the following sentence for his research paper on giraffes. The wide savannah is roamed by tall, graceful giraffes.

His teacher told him to revise this sentence so that it is more appropriate for formal writing.
Don't forget to explain how to revise the sentence.

The open Savannah is traveled by tall, graceful giraffes.

3rd person, because the narrator is out of the story but explains the feeling of the main character

i believe the answer is: b. mr. head had a long, tube-like face with a rounded open jaw and a short depressed nose.

this is because in the un-revised sentence it said that mr. heads face was long and tube-like, and he had a rounded open jaw. this is not a very grammatically correct because of how it seems to drag on with the and, replaced with, with, makes it sound more fluent in the description.