PLZZ Help Choose one body paragraph from your informational article to revise.
Copy this paragraph into a new document.
Review your paragraph for coherence. Make sure you have a topic sentence and supporting ideas for this topic.
Combine two or more sentences in your paragraph for varied syntax.
Review your paragraph for correct English language conventions. Correct any errors.
Write a short reflection paragraph on the revisions you made, describing the changes you made and how these changes improved your writing.
In one document, submit:

the original paragraph
the revised paragraph
the reflection on the changes you have made

Here is the body paragraph I chose
Vultures are widely distributed, but they are absent from Australia and
most oceanic islands. Most have broad food habits, consuming carrion,
garbage, and even excrement, but rarely do they descend upon live
animals. A few occasionally take helpless prey such as lambs and tortoises
or, in the case of Andean condors, newborn calves. Vultures may remain
aloft for hours, soaring gracefully on long, broad wings. When one bird
descends to a dead or dying animal, others may be attracted from miles
away. When feeding, vultures maintain a strict social order based on body
size and strength of beak. Smaller vultures must wait for the scraps left
behind by the larger, dominant species. Even large vultures, however, give
way to nearly all mammalian competitors, including jackals, hyenas, and
coyotes.