Li-Young is writing a suspense story for a local summer camp's evening fireside program. This is his first paragraph.
The old house next door had been empty for years. Ginny
couldn't remember a time when anyone had lived there.
Then, one night, she heard noises coming from the house.
When she glanced out her window, she thought she saw
something move in one of the upstairs rooms. She decided
to investigate and went to wake up her brother.
How should Li-Young revise this paragraph to elaborate on
specific ideas in the text?