The writer could best revise the passage to make it stronger by adding a claim about the dangers of travel.
adding a thesis to introduce the topic of cows.
adding a quotation from Hughes about the events.
adding a summary of the details using different words.

adding a thesis to introduce the topic of cows.

Explanation:

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chapter i -- paris: september, 1792

a surging, seething, murmuring crowd of beings that are human only in name, for to the eye and ear they seem naught but savage creatures, animated by vile passions and by the lust of vengeance and of hate.

during the greater part of the day the guillotine had been kept busy at its ghastly work: all that france had boasted of in the past centuries, of ancient names, and blue blood, had paid toll to her desire for liberty and for fraternity.

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