Editing Challenge: Fluency!
Directions: Read the following paragraph aloud. Rewrite the paragraph to improve fluency. Make revisions to eliminate the
monotony. Combine the choppy simple sentences into longer sentences that flow smoothly without the constant interruption of
periods. Use transition words and phrases, and a variety of sentence styles to improve cadence and rhythm. Use adjectives,
adverbs, or other words to enhance the main idea of the paragraph. Correct any grammatical and mechanial issues
(capitalization, punctuation, verb tense, etc...). Punctuate with flair! Be creative!
My Favorite Career
My favorite career is a professional athlete. A professional athlete has a lot of status. She eams a lot of money. She works at
what she loves. She gets respect. A professional athlete must work hard. She must work long days. Sometimes, her body aches.
She must still work out and go to practice. She must stay physically strong. She must eat healthy foods. She must practice a
healthy lifestyle. She can get injured too. A professional athlete can work in her sport when she is young. She can work as a
coach later. Maybe she can even work as a sports broadcaster. There are lots of alternatives. Professional athlete is my favorite
sport for all these reasons.
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