Read the sentence from a student's critical analysis essay. In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson talks about independence through his use of big words and fancy argument skills. Which is the best revision to the sentence? Thomas Jefferson put difficult words and strong argumentative abilities to work when he wrote the Declaration of Independence. In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson uses his command of the English language to make a powerful argument for American independence. Thomas Jefferson uses fanciful words and great arguments to make a case for American independence in the Declaration of Independence. In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson talks using sophisticated words to make a good case so that Britain will give Americans their independence.

In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson uses his command of the English language to make a powerful argument for American independence.

Explanation:

When the student states that, in the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson used large words and sophisticated persuasive arguments, he shows how Jefferson had a strong and efficient command of the English language, being able to use it to his advantage by demanding something in a cultured, elegant and sophisticated way. . In this case, JEfferson used the words to demand that England give freedom and independence to the American colonies, but he did so, without offending and using weak and ill-prepared arguments.

With that, we can say that the best way to revise the statement given by the student is with the sentence: "In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson uses his command of the English language to make a powerful argument for American independence."