After pitching her business venture idea to various investors in face-to-face meetings,
Janet tried another route--taking
her
request for investors to online media.
Revise or not revise

honestly you should not write it the word placement is not right and this does not sound right so i think you should write it this way. the life lessons i refused to learn, taught me the hard way this sounds way better you should try it! hope this is very !

"the sandy walls seemed to collapse in on themselves"

and

"the bloodshot waters seemed to have no bottom"

the third answer is right : )

i hope this you with your work! : )