Can someone give me revisions and make sure it has these three components: a description of the setting, introduction to main characters, hook your reader with a vivid description or interesting quote (Note: this is just an introduction) “Come on, it will be fun, I promise.”
Best friends Dan Clark and Christopher Watson (Kit for short) were going to Stoddard's grocery store to get some snacks for a movie night with their friends when they noticed a flyer for “BARLOW'S GREAT NORTH AMERICAN CIRCUS.” On the afternoon and evening on May 18th at Smyrna, Tennessee. There was going to be a performance with a great variety of attractions. With acts such as clowns, trapeze artists, rope walkers, wild animals, and more! They’ve always seen circuses in movies and tv shows, and they were excited to buy tickets. But their friends were not as excited. “Come on, it will be fun, I promise.” “I can't, my mom asked me to babysit.” Their friend, Gwen said. “I'm going to a concert with Jason and I hate clowns.” Jackson explained, in the sea of their excuses came Stefanie’s tiny voice. “I can go.” Stefanie is Jackson’s sister. She is the youngest out of the group who just tagged along with her brother because their mom told him to bring her. So on May 18th, two-and-a-half hours before the afternoon performance, Dan, Kit, and Stefanie met up and were driving to the circus. “Where is it? 21 East Crimson Avenue, Smyrna, Georgia. Are you sure? Yeah. 100% sure? Yes! Just drive!” Dan argued. Once they arrived Dan and Kit noticed that it wasn’t as alive and bright as it was in the flyer more than it was dark gray, and dull; with some most horrifying imagery on the tents. Inside was just as horrifying and in the lighting the innocent looking hoops and ropes looked as if they could be weapons.