How can i improve my writing? He pulls me closer by the waist of my pants, which makes my heart flutter. I know what's coming and it melts my insides when he kisses me as if it we've known each other our entire lives; so strong and passionate, yet extremely sad and desperate. He's my rock and he knows. He knows I couldn't live without him. As we dance together in the middle of the living room, my pregnant belly bumping against his, I recall how we fell in love i the first place. we met two years ago, I was 23 and he 22.

honestly, this is already good, and I would suggest the first place falling in love, you could do a flashback. So, the character may have been having a bad day or just lost something important, and he (the other main character) ran into her on accident but noticed she was not okay. He proceeds to comfort her and then the flashback is over. They then have a conversation (in the present time) about how they first fell in love and how they knew it was love at first sight.

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I don't know just an idea

I honestly think that this sample write is, AMAZING. Though it could go for a flashback of how they met, also maybe a age change, but those suggestions are up to the writer.

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The flashback could be about how they met, and how they fell in love.

And the age change, well that's up to the writer if she wants to change the age, but I would go for ages late 20's or early 30's. But again this is up to the writer.

HOPE THIS HELPS :)

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