(1) Patience is not required to achieve one's goals. (2) One reason for this is that people can always
make up any lack of patience with passion. (3) For
example, my cousin's sister was diagnosed with multiple
sclerosis last year. (4) My cousin was very upset, and the
first way he thought to help her was to raise money for a
multiple sclerosis charity. (5) He wanted to raise $10,000
for the charity. (6) Everyone told him that it would take a
while to do that. (7) He did not have the patience to wait
that long. (8) He wanted to help now! (9) His passion for
doing something to help his sister drove him as he set up
a website, rounded up friends to help him, and contacted
dozens of business and community leaders very quickly.
(10) He raised the money in just two weeks! (11) His
passion made any sense of patience completely
unnecessary
Which sentence most effectively revises sentence 6
to strengthen the evidence?
Everyone told him that it would take two weeks to
raise $10,000.
A few people told him that it would take a while to
do that
Several people warned him that it could take
months or even years to raise that much money,
Everyone told him that he would not have the
patience to raise the money.