Verb Usage 8.2: Question 4 The following is from a student's rough draft essay. She needs to
revise her writing to use literary present tense. What is the best
revision?
At the start of Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry finds out
he is a wizard. One of his first stops was Diagon Alley, where he
visited the wizard bank and purchased items for school.
Select one:
O
At the start of Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry found out he was a
wizard. One of his first stops was Diagon Alley, where he visited the wizard bank
and purchased items for school.

A

Explanation:

past tense is using was, and ending it with -ed

1. the details that would clarify the authors purpose for writing would be after the "haley collected used soccer jersey and sent them to guatemalan children." part, he would say, "and you can also donate today to save ". so far in the text, you can see no such thing. if, near the end the author persuades you to donate to guatemalans, then you know that the author's reason to write is to persuade you.

2. what details would make the text more engaging is to see the guatemalan children's reaction to getting free jerseys.

3. the details that convey the author's attitude would be an opinion by the author, for example, if he said, "haley was a very nice girl " or, you can find the attitude by finding parts of haley's personality that he highlights. you can strengthen your tones by using more descriptive words, and simplify long sentences as much as you can.

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