Read the sentences from a student’s essay about “the treasure of lemon brown.”

in this story, lemon brown make a great impact on greg by showing him the value of the bond between fathers and sons. greg then appreciates his own father better, despite his father’s shortcomings.

what is the best way to revise the last sentence?

replace “greg then” with “in conclusion, greg”
replace “greg then” with “therefore, greg”
replace “greg then” with “consequently, greg”
replace “greg then” with “so, greg”

faulty parallelism is a grammar construction where there is no balance in the parts of a sentence they have a similar meaning but the grammar structure is not equivalent.

the correct version of this faulty parallelism in the sentence is:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation's third president.

the problem with the first version is that the sentence:

"jefferson was both the writer of the declaration of independence"

presents jefferson as both a subject and an agent for the verb "write" because if he was "the writer" then the declaration of independence was written by him, besides that fact, the sentence presents a dependent clause.

while the second sentence:

he was the nation's third president.

presents a basic subject+verb+object structure

so, to give a proper balance to the structure, or better said, to give a parallel structure, we must write a basic s+v+o structure in both sentences:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation third president.

a. beside the fence

explanation:

hi my name is bob.hi and bye and this this tahta jjsab jjja