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the following is a sample thesis. the quotation portion needs revision and clarity. revise to strengthen the claim being presented.
consumers are easily fooled by advertisements because "they always want more stuff and are willing to pay for it."

You could revise it like this:

Consumers are easily fooled by advertisements because they find interest in items that may look needed, but are actually just wanted material objects, and they end up investing in it, 9 out of 10 times this happens.

when alex falls for the charming new boy at school, cole -- a handsome, funny, sports star who adores her - she can't believe she's finally found her soul who truly loves and understands her.  

at first, alex is blissfully happy. sure, cole seems a little jealous of her relationship with her close friend zack, but what guy would want his girlfriend spending all her time with another boy? as the months pass, though, alex can no longer ignore cole's small put-downs, pinches, or increasingly violent threats.  

as alex struggles to come to terms with the sweet boyfriend she fell in love with and the boyfriend whose "love" she no longer recognizes, she is forced to choose -- between her "true love" and herself.

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