Can you review my homework to see if anything needs fixing up?

how well do the animals work together? is everything fair?
most of the animals are working well together. mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47) and on the other side of the spectrum, the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of it while boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), got the same as the people who did what they were told and no more. this makes things a bit less fair than they should because boxer should be rewarded in some way for his volunteering and mollie should work more.

Most of the animals are working well together. Mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47) and on the other side of the spectrum, the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of it while Boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), got the same as the people who did what they were told and no more. This makes things a bit less fair than they should because Boxer should be rewarded in some way for his volunteering and Mollie should work more.

Explanation:

The sentence I have underlines is a run on sentence. Here's how I would write it instead:

Mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47), whereas the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of Mollie's tardiness. Boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), volunteered more than others and went above and beyond others.

some sort of sound device i believe.

i'm a frog i'm a frog i read about frogs i breath thee frogs the frogs are great but not me