Ineed with a fictional writing assignment we are doing in class. this is what i’ve written so far. what do you think?

chapter 1
love, pain, happiness, this is my life. tomorrow is my birthday and my parents seem like they have completely forgotten, but i know better. waking up, i do what i would on any typical day. i go for my morning run, eat breakfast, shower, and get ready for work.
a typical day at work, as well. all i do is sit at my desk and read the latest news. i’m a news paper author. my employers pay me buy how many papers i sell. people from all over the place come to read my paper. i call my parents after work and this is how our conversation
“hey mom. hey dad. where are you? ”
mom answers, “we are on our way home, but there is quite a bit of traffic. don’t wait for us for dinner, feed illianna and joshua at the regular time.”
still smiling at the joke i say, “alright mom, love you guys see you when you get home.”
simultaneously they say, “love you to ladybug.” then dad says, “see you when we get there. bye,” and hangs up the phone.
i laugh at the goofy prank my parents are playing.
picking up illianna and josh from their babysitter and heading home to begin dinner. 30 minutes in the car and we are home. it took an hour to cook chicken and alfredo pasta for dinner. my favourite. seeing as how it is my birthday, i don’t think it’s a bad idea to have my favourite dinner.
“dinner time! ” i call to joshua. walking over to go get illiana, joshua passes me in the hallway. “did you wash your hands? ” he looks at me like a guilty culprit, “joshua, you know the rules. go wash your hands.” i pick up illiana and her wash her hands. just before i sit down with my siblings to eat the dinner i prepared, the doorbell rang. “start eating, i’ll be back in a second.” i look at josh. “okay sarah.” he says and starts eating.
looking through the peephole my heart sinks. there are police officers at my door.