Just read my 2 paragraphs and give feedback. all i need is proofreading.
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what to look for is
1. a clear introduction providing an overview of the first section of the novel.
2. paragraph two should discuss the utopian aspects with evidence from the
the setting of the novel fahrenheit 451 by ray bradbury is a utopia in which the 30-year-old firefighter, guy montag lives. montag is in a society where everything people do is fun and entertaining without any question. guy montag in being a firefighter is responsible for burning every book and also houses that contain them. however, montag notices he is not happy with the way things are with his job, his wife millie, and his surroundings. after meeting clarrise mcclellan, his neighbor, his curiosity begins to fill his mind. montag's wife doesn’t seem to care about how montag feels or what he does for her. even though montag and millie have been married for years, montag realizes, after the overdose incident, that he doesn't know much about his wife at all. montag now wants to quit his job. montag's boss captain beatty, has been suspicious with montag and comes over to his house before montag can call in sick. after captain beatty’s visit montag confesses to millie about his book stash. once millie panics, montag tries to explain to her that having these books can be beneficial. once they know what's inside the books they will destroy them together. captain beatty seemingly knows how montag is feeling and knows what he is hiding.
to start, this society may seem like a utopia at first, because everyone gets to do what they want and have fun without any consequences. guy montag's house has three walls that are tv screens. millie likes to enjoy watching her tv family for most of the day. people also ride jet cars at top speeds on the road. schools are mainly athletic activities and keeping students engaged, they have television classes. captain beatty stated "don't we keep them moving, don't we give them fun? that's all we live for, isn't it" (bradbury 56). this tells the reader that all there is to do is fun, and to enjoy life.