For the purpose of remembering to utilize it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note in reference to the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim.

which choice best revises the sentence to cut down on wordiness while retaining the sentence's meaning?
a) the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim, so he could utilize it in his cross-examination.
b) for the purpose of utilizing it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim.
c) the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim for the purpose of utilizing it in his cross-examination.
d) for the purpose of remembering to utilize it in his cross-examination, the prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim.

A)The prosecuting attorney made a note about the defendant's anger when speaking about the victim, so he could utilize it in his cross-examination.

This is best revises the original sentence for wordiness. The words eliminated are "For the purpose of remembering to". Taking out these prepositional phrases focuses the dependent clause on the verb utilize rather than the actions of remembering and purpose. This helps to eliminate confusion or distractions for the reader. One way to help eliminate answers is that option D does not really make any changes. Option B and C are the same except for the placement of the dependent clause. Moving the dependent clause does not actually change the wordiness of the sentence.

1. the details that would clarify the authors purpose for writing would be after the "haley collected used soccer jersey and sent them to guatemalan children." part, he would say, "and you can also donate today to save ". so far in the text, you can see no such thing. if, near the end the author persuades you to donate to guatemalans, then you know that the author's reason to write is to persuade you.

2. what details would make the text more engaging is to see the guatemalan children's reaction to getting free jerseys.

3. the details that convey the author's attitude would be an opinion by the author, for example, if he said, "haley was a very nice girl " or, you can find the attitude by finding parts of haley's personality that he highlights. you can strengthen your tones by using more descriptive words, and simplify long sentences as much as you can.

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