So i'm writing an essay and i would like someone to proof read and edit it. the intoduction is suppised to be grabbing, but im not aure if i made it too long.

I wouldn't repeat sudden.

I would take out was, it isn't needed because you explained your actions in the previse sentence

found instead of find

However, you hear the noise a second time. Louder than the first.

That's a start.  I would look up how to write a correct MLA style paper

scout gets in a bad position on the primary day of school since she can read and on the grounds that she can compose. she likewise gets in a bad position for explaining to miss caroline that she shouldn't attempt … to loan cash to walter on the grounds that he won't take it since he is to poor to pay it back.