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there are many ads in the world trying to sell products that can or maybe make your life much better. however, there are other ads that can make people hungry for food. mcdonalds ads can pull customers in and make people hungry with the tricks they use for ads.

the ad makes people hungry and motivates them to go out and grab a big mac for themselves. just from looking at the ad it sort of pulls me in and makes me think i want one as well. in the ad you can see large texts of white that can easily catch your eyes and make you imagine yourself with a big mac. there is also the big red background that they used to make the words stand out from the rest. they did that to make you read a small sentence that will be stuck i your for the rest of the day.

the ad can also attract peoples attention when they see the big words in the center. when it comes to the words in the ad and the way the message is read. it makes me think that everyone in the whole world is eating a big mac with out me and that i should go and get one for myself just to fit in. the way the message was written also tells me that people love big macs and how delicious it is to eat.

fast food ads are everywhere and they all have one or two colors a like and there red and yellow. the colors in the mcdonald ad has red, yellow and also white. red and yellow, which is the colors of joy and anger, can also be the colors of hunger. most fast food restaurants like mcdonald's and other places has these colors. like burger king, wendy’s, arby’s, in and out, and also kfc. “researchers are actually in agreement that warm colors like red and yellow increase the heart rate and hunger rate". red and yellow isn’t just a color is that has to do with hunger. there are other colors like grey which makes people turn away from the thought of food, and brown makes people feel less hungry.

in conclusion, ads like mcdonald’s pull in customers and make people hungry by using tricks and making words on an ad stand out. like a bluebird in the white room. colors also contribute by making people hungry. if we just ignore the ads and eat on our own time, maybe we can lose some fat and gain control over the things we eat.

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There are many ads in the world trying to sell products that could potentially help make your life better. However, there are other ads that can make people hungry for food. McDonald's ads can pull customers in and make people hungry with tactical tricks.

McDonald's advertisements make people hungry and motivate them to go out and grab a big mac for themselves. Simply by looking at the ad pulls me in and makes me think I want one as well. In the ad, you can see large texts of white that can easily catch your eyes and make you imagine yourself with a big mac. There is also the big red background that they used to make the words stand out from the rest. They do these things to make you read a small sentence that will be stuck in your head for the rest of the day.

The ad can also attract people's attention when they see the big words in the center. When it comes to the words in the ad and the way the message is read. It makes me think that everyone in the whole world is eating a big mac without me and that I should go and get one for myself just to fit in. The way the message was written also tells me that people love big macs and how delicious it is to eat.

Fast food ads are everywhere and they all have one or two colors alike: red and yellow. The colors in the McDonald advertisement has red, yellow and also white. Red and yellow, which is the colors of joy and anger, can also be the colors of hunger. Most fast food restaurants like McDonald's and other places have these colors such as Burger King, Wendy’s, Arby’s, In and Out, and KFC.

According to ___(state where you found this quote), "researchers are actually in agreement that warm colors like red and yellow increase the heart rate and hunger rate".

Red and yellow isn’t merely just a color. They also have to do with hunger. There are other colors like grey which makes people turn away from the thought of food, and brown makes people feel less hungry.

In conclusion, ads like McDonald’s pull in customers and make people hungry by using skillful methods and making words on an ad stand out, like a bluebird in a white room. Colors also contribute by making people hungry. If we just ignore the ads and eat on our own time, maybe we can lose some fat and gain control over the things we eat.